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[Elissa]

I wrote this poem for LC (my SO) and I was hoping for some opinions.
It's called "Memoirs of Summer Rain" Please don't steal it. It means a lot to me


You came into my life like a gentle sigh
Nothing at first,
Becoming more and more as time went by..
You were like a tear,
Slowly sliding down my cheek,
But soon disappearing,
Slipping out of my reach..
You were sharp, hard, jagged.
Dangerous to touch
You were distant and elusive,
Never saying too much.
You were the prick of a needle,
Causing many jumps in pain.
You were warm and unexpected,
Feeling like summer rain.
You were a glass of lemonade,
Sour and sweet
You were a vicious fighter,
Refusing defeat
You were a blessing in disguise,
Unseen by the naked eye,
You were smooth like cherry wine,
Intoxicating and sublime...
But we were running out of time,
So I had to make you mine

[mllebamako]

I LOVE it!! I don't know enough about poetry to give you a detailed opinion. But i think it's really great!